The goal is to learn how to write better.

分析的目的是为了提高科技英语写作水平(不是针对作者)。

Green highlight is used to show good writing.

绿色: 好好学习。

Yellow means "questionable."

黄色：有问题。

Blue is for discussion.

蓝色: 值得讨论。

Weakening Atlantic overturning circulation causes South Atlantic salinity pile-up

https://www.nature.com/articles/s41558-020-0897-7?utm_source=nclimate_etoc&utm_medium=email&utm_campaign=toc_41558_10_11&utm_content=20201031&sap-outbound-id=FFD0A2430D5B4BDFC6A8A19CB4B122A7308BE0EF

The Atlantic Meridional Overturning Circulation (AMOC) is an active component of the Earth’s climate system¹ and its response to global warming is of critical importance tosociety. 

评论：这两部分，中间应该用“，and”。

Climate models have shown an AMOC slowdown under anthropogenic warming since the industrial revolution^2,3,4, but this slowdown has been difficult to detect in the short observational record^5,6,7,8,9,10 because of substantial interdecadal climate variability. 

This has led to the indirect detection of the slowdown from longer-term fingerprints^11,12,13,14 such as the subpolar North Atlantic ‘warming hole’¹¹. 

评论：英式英语。

However, these fingerprints, which exhibit some uncertainties¹⁵, are all local indicators of AMOC slowdown around the subpolar North Atlantic. 

Here we show observational and modelling evidence of a remote indicator of AMOC slowdown outside the North Atlantic. 

评论：evidence不带s。

Under global warming, the weakening AMOC reduces the salinity divergence and then leads to a ‘salinity pile-up’ remotely in the South Atlantic. 

评论：可以不要the和then。

This evidence is consistent with the AMOC slowdown under anthropogenic warming and, furthermore, suggests that this weakening has likely occurred all the way into the South Atlantic.